What do you think of my song?

First song I ever written:

Home, above the fiery clouds
Is where I like to stay
Far, from the dreary crowds
where my mind can soar
I watch the Air corps
Wings, crystallize
Before my very eyes

Frozen thoughts!
Melt them away
Melt them away
They'd rather not!
Melt them away
Melt them away

Darling can't you see
The Diamonds falling
Down, to the Earth
Dazzling Rebirth
A place where dreams are made
A snowy Masquerade
Along a chilled lake
Our thoughts seem so fake

Frozen thoughts!
Melt them away
Melt them away
They'd rather not!
Melt them away
Melt them away

Century old Glaciers
Need time for breaking
Century old Glaciers
Dreams in the making

Century old Glaciers
Need time for breaking
Century old Glaciers
Dreams in the making

We'll leave it up to You.